Wednesday, 2 April 2014

Tanka

   
Day 4

Dverse

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the light grew dimmer
as the boat sailed silently
out to the ocean
the sobbing on the shoreline
mingled with soft laps of waves

13 comments:

  1. Ahh, the Viking funeral. Beautifully sad. Compelling write.

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  2. Oh, I can see this ever so clearly.

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  3. Including the soft laps of waves softened this very sad poem. Beautiful.

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  4. Gorgeous, so emotive I really feel this...wonderfully expressed.

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  5. Very emotional departure ~ I like the mingling of tears and soft waves ~

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  6. There was a hint of it in the poem, but I wasn't quite sure, until I saw the accompanying picture. Nicely done.

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  7. when i go...
    i want a viking funeral

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    1. Very expensive...but for you....special price!

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  8. I agree with Brian Miller, but my wife said no.

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  9. Ah. this is quite a normal funeral in Sweden.. for budget funeral we use paper-boats...

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  10. I always love legends. And rituals.

    Hi Cressida!

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  11. Every departure is frightening and sad. Particularly a funereal voyage.

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