Wednesday, 14 May 2014

Tilus Form



 the earth keeps spinning round
 we cling on


 tight






large asteroids could present
a problem


boom



the sun is a dying star
so are we


poof

comets are made up of
coloured gas


whoosh

the gibbous moon watches
us  - smile say


cheese

22 comments:

  1. ha - cheeeeese-- smiles... cool galactic excursion... i find the planets so highly fascinating and just too wondrous for my brain to really fathom it

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  2. I'm going through a cosmic phase:)

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  3. Cool how you reached out to the cosmos. That last one gave me a smile!

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  4. nice! so fun with the sound words

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  5. did you see that near earth pass last week...all it would take is a little change...and boom, for sure...if it was cheese i bet we would have found a way to get back already...ha

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  6. At my film club this month, we themed "The Universe in Three Acts", reviewing PARTICLE FEVER, PI, & LE QUATTRO VOLTE. Your Tilus, especially the last one brought our cosmic chatter to mind.

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  7. Oh smiling at the moon.. I like that ---

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  8. What do you call those words that are just noises??? Ah... Wish I could remember, but in any case I like how your use of them has made this come alive in such a remarkable way!

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  9. Cool - we both wrote about the moon! It was a full moon last night :)
    You went much larger scale than me though - loved it!

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  10. The last one made me smile ~ Love the heavenly verses :-)

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  11. From beginning to end...wow!!! the ending blow away.

    say cheese! The Apocalypse is coming. :) I love your poem here. awesome!

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  12. hold on tight and smile...what more can we do?

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  13. the last one made me smile..saying cheese..

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  14. Hold on tight and say cheese...a user's manual for the universe. :)

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  15. some grand cosmic tiluses....love the last one :)

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  16. Ooh, nasty irony here — so well expressed.

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  17. You also went for the interjections - a clever way to add so much humour and energy to this very brief form.

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  18. Cressida, these tiluses are awesome. You made the form more entertaining to read & write about with your very factual takes. And yes that last one is soo good---i loved it. Thank you. smiles.

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  19. I do hang on tight, it's a wild ride!

    If only I could spin off and colonize Mars :)

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  20. I cling in case of that boom, poof and whoosh. And say "Cheese!" Nicely done.

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  21. Cool images. But the first one is existential and experiential. Well done.

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  22. Cool - I absolutely enjoyed your experiment with the galaxy, such unique perspective yet so well built.

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