Saturday, 25 November 2017
Bill Withers - Lovely Day (Original Version)
TROIKU
it was a lovely day
the gentle sea breeze stirred
lightly waving palm fronds
the sea blue green and white
sun shining on the surfers
gliding like dancers
you came back today
even the seagulls smiled
it's been a long time
it was a lovely day
the sea blue green and white
you came back today
Carpe Diem Haiku Kai
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A beautifully created troiku.
ReplyDeleteWow!! when some loved one returns, we feel so much bliss
ReplyDeleteI always come back...like a bad penny
ReplyDeleteWhat an interesting form. I bet it's a challenge (and delight) to weave together.
ReplyDeleteLove the gentleness of the tale, how the return is a dance, that starts and ends on the same step...
Beautiful poem. Such a gentle poem ending with that glorious...you came back today.
ReplyDeleteI especially love the surfers gliding like dancers.....I hear the joy of a homecoming.......
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed this gentle troiku, especially the 'sea blue green and white' and the smiling seagulls. It's wonderful when a loved one returns.
ReplyDeletewonderful troiku! it's amazing how the process of stripping away words, and seeking essences can really offer the most power in the telling
ReplyDeleteI love the song. I love the poem. It is a joyful spot to rest in.
ReplyDeleteA loved one can certainly bring good tidings. Wonderful troiku
ReplyDeleteHank
What a peaceful poem.
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